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PostSubject: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptyFri Feb 20, 2015 9:07 pm

Here's where you all can come and discuss the story or ship relationships ^^ talk about character or compalim just please don't do the feedback on my story thread XD please
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptyFri Feb 20, 2015 9:29 pm

Its good so far keep it up! ^^ I can't wait till they shift. c:<
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptySat Feb 21, 2015 11:12 am

It's coming along lovely. It's actually quite interesting and it keeps the reader (at least me) interested in wanting to read more.
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptySat Feb 21, 2015 2:06 pm

Well I'm glad you all are interested I the story ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptySun Feb 22, 2015 12:20 pm

I'm not sure, I think that Ravar is not fully explained; and also that the switch in points of view is not clear. I'm also confused as to what time period or kind of world it is. The writing is good though, and the description is in the perfect places.
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptySun Feb 22, 2015 3:01 pm

It's a medieval era and I am still learning the process of writing Im beginning, I promise it'll get better >.<
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptySun Feb 22, 2015 3:05 pm

I know; you're a great writer. Sorry if my criticism was insensitive. Very Happy (cliche phrase I believe)
You're off to a great start; good luck, your story is a great idea!
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptySun Feb 22, 2015 3:08 pm

Offf I love criticism
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptyMon Feb 23, 2015 9:35 pm

Good to hear!

(this might not be the place, but Marshmellow say Yaine is sexy, or am I seeing things?)
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptyTue Feb 24, 2015 3:31 am

She has it coded so anyone viewing it it says their name
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptyTue Feb 24, 2015 8:19 am

okay; thanks!
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptyWed Feb 25, 2015 8:39 am

Lol everyone's so confused on that. xD Sorry <3
I'm going to be writing a story, perhaps.
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PostSubject: Re: Feedback of the story   Feedback of the story EmptyWed Feb 25, 2015 5:39 pm

Awesome! I'll read that one two Very Happy
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